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Love outside Vienna
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A trickling rain; my fingers fall against
the waning crecent of your ivory neck.
A starving child that's waiting for a dish;
my eyes stare wild at skin newly undressed.
As fingers grasp onto your auburn hair:
(yank hard so now your eyes can catch the clouds)
I wonder if you're seeking more up there,
because out comes a scream with pious sound.
A Roman arch; and then: your form relaxed.
A mix of sweat and wine define the air.
I gently run my hand across your back,
and whisper something softly in your ear
...ti amo mia donna felina
the waning crecent of your ivory neck.
A starving child that's waiting for a dish;
my eyes stare wild at skin newly undressed.
As fingers grasp onto your auburn hair:
(yank hard so now your eyes can catch the clouds)
I wonder if you're seeking more up there,
because out comes a scream with pious sound.
A Roman arch; and then: your form relaxed.
A mix of sweat and wine define the air.
I gently run my hand across your back,
and whisper something softly in your ear
...ti amo mia donna felina
I'm starting to get the hang of this again. I always wanted to make love in a field.
Hmmm....
maybe someday....
*note
'ti amo mia donna felina' roughly means - I love you kitten.
Hmmm....
maybe someday....
*note
'ti amo mia donna felina' roughly means - I love you kitten.
© 2007 - 2024 azriphale
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I think this poem extols the virtues of iambic pentameter. I love I.P, it works so well and I reckon it is really accomodating. It's structurally tight, I like that, it is a fluid read. As you've adhered to this rhythmic style and a consistent 4-line stanza form, it really comes across as being very mature work. I'm betting that this is one of your favourites? I'd understand why, it's a mature (formally) piece of poetry that has some lovely imagery, and a nice turn of phrase:
"I wonder if you're seeking more up there,
because out comes a scream with pious sound."
This is a delightful moment where you capture male emoto-sexual paranoia in a lovely way.
Good one guvnor! You have to read mine now.
"I wonder if you're seeking more up there,
because out comes a scream with pious sound."
This is a delightful moment where you capture male emoto-sexual paranoia in a lovely way.
Good one guvnor! You have to read mine now.